Book Progress

Progress update #5 – 4th excerpt

I’m really disappointed in myself. I’m behind on everything now, even my revisions. My deadline is approaching fast and I’m not going to be able to finish revising all 48 chapters. So far, I have only done 12. I’m hoping to get to chapter 20 by March 6th. Then I’ll be adding all my chapters to one document as is and sending it off to my first beta reader.

I’m super nervous but at the same time, a bit excited. I want to know what the beta reader will think and if she will be able to figure out the twists in my story or not. As of right now, my parents and brother have read some of my story. One has only read the first chapter and the other two finished chapter 3 the other day…they’re so slow. At this rate, they’ll be done reading it by the end of the year or longer.

Other news.I have been brainstorming some great ideas for the second book in my series. I’m so excited! I came up with nearly the entire story for one of my characters, Oziah. My books follow multiple characters and they’re all doing different things at once. But I try to tie everything in with the other characters-this is the hard part and takes quite a lot of thought. I have already added one new character, haven’t named her yet, and I’m already liking her. Also, I have a lot of planning to do for what will be happening in one of the kingdoms and lets say it won’t be anything good. I’m so excited with my new ideas and I really want to start writing it but I can’t. 😦 Only brainstorming and organizing/outlining is allowed until I get closer to finishing the first book.

I have also come up with a name for my series. It may change but as of right now it is called ‘The Naharians of Odinaty.’ The Naharians are a race, who look like humans. They have abilities and they all originated from the kingdom, Odinaty. Though there are a few other races in the world, the series revolves around the Naharians. As to how they got their abilities, that’s something super secret and I can’t say.

Last week, I posted a tab on the navigation bar, ‘Become my Beta Reader’ but there will be more news on it later—hopefully sometime in April. If you’re interested in beta reading my work, keep an eye out for the announcement in the next few months. I added this to try and push myself to work harder but it doesn’t seem to be working so well. I’ve also been debating whether or not I should find a critique partner. Right now I’m really busy and can’t but maybe in a few months when I’m searching for betas.

I wasn’t going to post an excerpt this week but I decided to anyway, since I have been fixing some of my chapters. This is an unedited version and may change. One of my favorite characters is in this part—Baust. I hope you enjoy it. 🙂


“My, my, look who walked out of her cave.”

Valinia’s face turned a shade of white, and her grip tightened around the glass as her gaze shifted towards a person who stood beside her. They were lean, with a slim face, high cheekbones, turned up nose, and long flaxen hair. She swore they resembled a woman, until they spoke again in the same deep voice.

“The air is contaminated with your breath, it could make an unborn child an abomination.” He leaned towards her, his gaze piercing but the curl in his lip showed a distaste for her as if she were worse than trash. “Like you.

Valinia’s throat tightened. She could hardly breathe, let alone move. If she closed her eyes and waited they would surely leave.

A tray filled with glasses, jerked in front of her and blocked the feminine man from her view. She shifted her eyes to Baust who held it. He spoke through his barred teeth as he moved the tray closer to the feminine man’s face. “Would you care for another drink, sir?” Though his words were polite his tone filled with anger.

The feminine man flashed Baust a nasty stare. “No.” He gently pushed the tray away. “If you haven’t noticed, I’m already holding one.”

“Are you sure?” Baust cocked his head. “You might need one to help lighten your pissy attitude.”

A long and aggravated sigh came from the feminine man’s throat. He looked at Baust’s golden, brown hair for a moment. “I would wash your filthy hair for it is appalling as well as your mouth. That is, unless you want to be fired.”

“And who do you think the king will believe?” asked Baust. “It won’t be you. After all you did just insult his daughter.”

Baust and the feminine man stared one another down. After a few seconds, the feminine man forced his nose higher in the air and stormed off, banging into Baust’s shoulder.

His gaze met hers and he smiled, lowering the tray in front of her. “Here, try one of these instead. They’re sweeter.”

Valinia picked up a tall glass filled with red murky liquid and took a sip. It tasted sweet and only slightly bitter. “Thank you,” she said. “You didn’t have to say anything to that man. He would have left eventually.”

“I know, but I wanted to. You’re not what he said and no matter what others may believe you look magnificent.”

Valinia’s cheeks flushed bright red. “Thank you.”

“You’re welcome and remember, you’re never alone.”

7 thoughts on “Progress update #5 – 4th excerpt”

  1. Good job getting your second story idea put together! It’s so exciting to start the whole process anew.

    I’m sorry you’re struggling right now. As you know, I struggled with that myself recently and have just come out of it. I needed a couple weeks to clear my head and regain my focus. Now I’m well ahead of my editing schedule.

    One important part of that was being flexible with my goals. I knew I could always “reset” if I needed to, and I didn’t give myself any hard deadlines until the end (with the beta readers). I know that isn’t always possible – especially when you’ve got a hard-to-schedule beta with set dates. But don’t dwell on what you haven’t done; focus on what you’ve been able to achieve, and build on it. You’ll do great.

    I really like your excerpt. I think I missed one or two others, and I’m planning to go back through and read them. I want to see why the feminine man thinks Valinia is an abomination. I’m getting really excited to read your novel, which I know will be published WELL ahead of mine.

    I’m keeping my eyes open for when you update your beta page. Hopefully your schedule and mine can work together so I can volunteer as a beta for you. When you have time, maybe you can do the same for me (maybe on the next novel).

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    1. Thanks for the comment. 🙂 That’s great that you’re ahead now. I keep falling further behind. Hopefully by next quarter I’ll be caught up. I don’t think my novel will be published until next year. I still don’t have the cover or map done yet. I would have offered to beta read yours but I have been really busy. I’m think I might get betas sometime in April.


  2. I am sorry to hear you are disappointed in yourself. I can relate. My week hasn’t been going so great either. Barely any progress. But chances are those chapters you haven’t gotten to are in a better state than you think. It doesn’t need to be perfect before it gets to your beta. Do what you can, but don’t stress out too much, okay? 🙂 I’m cheering you on!

    I’m excited for you too. You’ll see your story in a totally new light once you start getting feedback from your beta. Glad your family is supportive! A little at a time is better than none at all. My dad actually asked me if he could read my book once I’m done with editing. I was amazed. (Though he’ll probably be really slow too. Lol.)

    Brainstorming sessions are great. Glad your second book is taking shape! Connecting character storylines is indeed difficult. I admire your ability to handle so many! Did I mention that I love all your character names (and the Nahariens sound so cool)?

    April sounds like a fine month. Though don’t stress it if it gets pushed back. I know you have your own personal goals but make sure to take care of you too. 🙂 I’ve been thinking about critique partners as well. I’m waiting a little while though for the same reason.

    Hurray! I’ve been eager for a new excerpt. 🙂 What an interesting scene! I could see it very clearly in my head. Aw I love Valinia and Baust already! 🙂 Question though: how is Baust pronounced?

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    1. Thank you so much for the comment and cheering me on. It really means a lot. 😀
      I do stress about it too much sometimes. I want it to be the best I can make it before betas…but maybe I should just finish up revising, add my notes, and get beats right after. That way, instead of stressing about it and reading over it so many times, I can get a second opinion.
      Yay! I’m glad you like their names. I was afraid people would think they were too different and weird. Its hard for me to write how his name is pronounced. I guess its kind of pronounced like Boston but remove the ‘on’, and say it as one syllable, emphasising the T. Lol. I don’t even know if that’s right. Thanks so much again. I’m glad you liked the excerpt.

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      1. Yes, that sounds like a good plan. There’s no need to overwhelm yourself. 🙂 I like when names are weird and give an idea of the cultural setting of the story. Right away I get a feel for your characters just from their names. 🙂 Okay, that was my second guess. (My first rhymed with joust lol) You’re welcome. Thanks so much for sharing!

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