Book Progress, My Characters

Progress Update #3 – First Excerpt


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  Edits have been going a bit slow for a few reasons. 

  1. I’ve been spending some time drawing after not doing so for over five years—I may share it later.
  2. I came up with some new ideas for two chapters and had to write one entirely and add to another.
  3. I’ve been doubting myself recently and find it difficult to work because I think my writing is terrible.

On the bright side I still got some work done—more than I did at the end of last year.

Since my last update I’ve edited 2 1/2 chapters which brings me to  9 1/2 out of 48 chapters to go. I edited the first chapter again and cut nearly 1,000 words of saids, redundancies and a bit of head hopping thoughts that weren’t necessary. I also came up with some more ideas and made two minor characters more important. One of them will be quite helpful in the next book.

I have 20 pages of notes to add to the story before the deadline of March 7th, and its approaching fast. I wanted to go over the entire story once again but I’m not sure if I will have enough time. Either way I’m still going to send it to the beta reader because I really need someone to look over the story and see if I messed up anything. My story is really complex and confusing with lots of twists, backstory and characters. It can be pretty overwhelming at times because I’m planning a series with multiple POVs and a lot of it ties together. Hopefully having another pair of eyes look at it will help.

I’ve been debating whether or not to share an excerpt. I spent a while trying to think of what I could share that is good but doesn’t have spoilers—a lot of my story does. I’m really nervous because I’m very critical of my writing.

Keep in mind its not edited and more than likely there will be changes. So here it goes…

“Thank ye!” he said, slapping her behind with a loud clap. She flinched and froze in place, tightening her grasp around the coins. Without a word she scurried back to the bar.

Swine,” muttered Alrin. His gaze narrowed at the man who chugged from a stein. Ale dripped down his beard and onto his soaked shirt.

“Ignore him.” Cassius took a sip of ale. “Most humans hate Naharian’s so it’s best not to draw any attention.”

Alrin’s hand balled into a fist on the table as the man grabbed the other stein.

Cassius firmly squeezed Alrin’s hand. His voice low but laced with anger. “Don’t you dare.”

Alrin stared at Cassius for a moment but kept his fist clenched. The stein shook in the man’s hand, the ale shot into the air and sprayed on his face. He wiped it away with his sleeve and blinked several times staring at the inside of the stein as if it were the most fascinating thing he had seen.

Alrin snorted and covered his mouth with his hand, suppressing his laugh. He knew it was wrong but he couldn’t help it. The man disgusted him in every possibly way and he had no right to treat a woman that way. His eyes darted around the tavern, not a single person looked their way-no one noticed. He looked at Roik who’s face hovered above his plate with a smirk across his lips. Despite Cassius’ death stare, it put him at a sense of ease.

“Why are you laughing?” asked Alsar.

Cassius removed his hand, his nostrils flared. “Ignore it.” He kept silent and continued to eat his meal to not draw any attention.

There you have it its a quick introduction of four characters. I might post another one in about a week or two with another update.

6 thoughts on “Progress Update #3 – First Excerpt”

  1. Okay, first off, you are a much better writer than you think. It’s natural to feel self doubt, but don’t let your own worries get you down. Your book gets better and better with each round of edits. Do you still have the very first draft? Sometimes to cheer myself up, I’ll reread parts of my first draft and compare to the second. Always helps me feel more confident!

    As for your excerpt, I love it! Good motion throughout, interesting, and engaging. I can just picture this scene! Makes me want to know more about your characters. Alrin and Alsar are brothers, right?

    Good luck with your progress! I look forward to more posts with updates. 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much. 🙂 I’ve been having doubt for a few days now. I was glad to get a chapter done but I’m having trouble starting another. I have the first draft and I get so embarrassed reading it because I couldn’t believe I wrote that. I know my writing has improved I just have this feeling where I’ll never be content with my writing. I’ll finish the 2nd draft, edit it again and again. I basically feel it will be an endless process and my story will never be finished. Yay! I’m glad you liked the excerpt and yes they are brothers. Thanks.


      1. I know what you mean, but the thing is a book is never going to be 100% perfect. You write, edit, send through betas, editors, and the like and come out with something better than before. You don’t need to be the best. Writing is a craft, and what it comes down to is the essence of your story, the feelings, the emotions, the characters. Perfection shouldn’t be a goal. If you’re obsessed with the little details, you’ll never finish. And you’re planning a series, right? Don’t you want to get onto the other books? Don’t get bogged down so much by the little things. Your writing is never as bad as you think it is. Get past that embarrassment. Learn to love what you’ve written. These are your characters, their story, their world. Finish their story and be proud of it. A book is a lot of work, and you’ve come a long way since the start! What you’re doing is amazing, and the more you write, the better you’ll get. 🙂

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      2. I know. I get in these moods now and then about my writing but a majority of the time I think my story and characters are awesome. 🙂 Writing a book is a huge accomplishment. I never thought I would have gotten this far. Thanks.

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